I'm posting to the SA development journal again - some stories for Travelogue. I needed to get my creative juices flowing again.
Do you want comments there or can I make them here? I'm firewalled away from livejournal at work.
Overall - I liked the Nanori and Builder's vignettes. I expect it will be explained why the Builders elders (the Wraiths I'll bet) don't like the idea of 14 or more thriving civilizations out there.
The Gaian and Independents vignette needs a bit more explanation of the organized crime piece and their goals.
The first set of stories is now done. I'm not sure if there will be a second set or if I'll just keep it simple. With the main book I wrote a second one if there was something else important about that civ that called out for explanation or example. If any of you are interested in writing something, please feel free. I'm especially interested to hear from the creators of the CAPP, Daoine, and Nanori.
Writing the stories often gives me more ideas for what to put in the rest of the civilization's description, so I might be able to touch those up now. Some of them feel short.
The Societies will not be getting their own stories. It would be excessive.
Travelogue is now up to 33 pages.
New elements in green.
I know I'm overfocused on my own creations, but I really love the "fascination, fascination, GET OUT" lines from the Nanori. Also, I suspect there should be an "opposed" line between them and the Union (being a monoculture) rather than them and the Logicians; who they'd probably pity more than oppose.
Colin, you might want to move that Respect between Builders and Logicians so its not sitting on the interesection of lines there. The same for the allies between Union and Replicants. Its a touch confusing.